The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The pie charts show the primary reasons why youngsters from African regions used their mobile
phones
from 2016 and 2019.
Overall
, the majority of teenagers used their
phones
for social networks over
all
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the given
period
,
while
the percentage of surveyors who purchased
phones
for calls was the
least
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lowest
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. It can be seen that in all years , the main reason for phone usage was social platforms and the percentage of these people was always near 50%, and
the
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in the
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last
year
of the given
period
it hit the peak
with
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at
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56%.Back
to
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in
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2016, a mere 15
percent
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per cent
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of surveyors used mobile
phones
because of
its
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their
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digital camera and the next
year
this
fraction remained stable. In
following
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the following
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years
this
trend went upward for 18% and 20% , in 2018 and 2019 respectively. The number of teens using their mobiles for email decreased throughout the given
period
.
In
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the beginning of the
period
, a quarter of them chose it for email , but in 2019,
this
trend reduced
for
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to
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6%, with
figure
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a figure
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19
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of 19
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%.
Therefore
, the proportion of people who use their
phones
for calls
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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, but it was the their least reason
of
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for
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phone usage
in
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apply
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every
year
and
the
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apply
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last
year
it
has shown
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showed
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only 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, period, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noticeable shift
  • communication preferences
  • considerably declined
  • functionalities
  • reflecting global trends
  • emerging trend
  • educational use of technology
  • diversification
  • traditional communication
  • digital forms of communication
  • instant messaging
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