The diagram below shows the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration presents an overview of the key stages involved in the manufacture of production carbonated drinks from five main steps namely
water
cleaning , heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing tank, filtering and filling and packing. Use synonyms
Overall
, raw Linking Words
water
is refined into crude ingredients to produce a usable product.
The whole process of carbonated drinks manufacturing starts when wastewater from people’s houses Use synonyms
are
collected and filtered through a filter machine in order to remove any undesirable dirt in raw Correct subject-verb agreement
is
water
. Use synonyms
Following
Linking Words
this
, a chemical is added to the filtered Linking Words
water
called softener chemicals before pumping Use synonyms
into
an electric heater with a high temperature to make Correct pronoun usage
it into
Use synonyms
water
evaporate. After that, it goes through a cooling pipe to reduce the heat and carbon dioxide is added. Once Correct article usage
the water
this
particular Linking Words
stage
in the manufacturing process has been completed, the carbonated Use synonyms
water
runs down via a tube to a mixing tank and supplements different chemicals Use synonyms
such
as colouring, syrup and flavour before moving to the next Linking Words
stage
.
After going into three steps, the Use synonyms
water
treatment re-enters a filter machine to remove impuritiesUse synonyms
again
. Rephrase
apply
Subsequently
, a penultimate Linking Words
stage
which is filling in cans and bottles is carried out. It Use synonyms
then
leads to the final Linking Words
stage
of the process where the bottles and cans of Use synonyms
water
are packaged into cartons and delivered to stores.Use synonyms
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