Many people believe that international tourism has negative implications on their countries. What is the reason for it? What can be done to change the negative attitude towards international tourism?

Over the
last
two or three decades, the international tourism industry
is
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improvised
due to
the
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globalization. Even though, many claim that international tourism has many drawbacks in countries. There are two main reasons
on
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this
trend
such
as increasing
the
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crime
activities
and pollution
while
this
essential remedy might be altered
this
like
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strict rules and regulations from the embassy.
To begin
with, foreign
travelers
sometimes misuse their travel purpose that exploring new places
instead
of doing some illegal
activities
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other
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nation by international trips
while
they hide products in
differnt
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different
ways. Crime
rate
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rates
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are increased
where
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a large
amount
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of people come and visit as a foreigner.
Polution
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Pollution
is
the
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another cause for
this
,
travelers
can visit
to
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around the country by using
vechiles
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vehicles
while
polution
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pollution
might be
increasd
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increased
,
thus
,the locals can suffer many environmental issues.
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, local natural resources can
mitigate
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by
vast
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amount of
travelers
visit
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visiting
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international places. There are two essential remedies
can
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be reduced
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this
bad impression. The
authority
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authorities
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should implement some strict rules and
regualtions
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regulations
to
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the
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international visitors. If they do any misleading
activities
, their passport will be banned by the embassy.
Travelers
might travel the public transportation
instead
of using
the
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priavte vehiles
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private vehicles
and
very
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short destinations they can walk to reach
that destinations
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. These solutions can
be solved
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this
issue. In conclusion, increasing crime
activities
and
polution
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pollution
are the main
cause
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causes
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of international tourism has neagtive impress but
the
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strict actions from the embassy and use the
private
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of private
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vehiles
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vehicles
can solve
this
issue.
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