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The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The data given presents the information
of
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Outokumpu
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's
stock
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price
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 changes in
Euro
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 from early 2006 to the end of 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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share
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the share
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price
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 of
Outokumpu
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 companies fluctuated throughout a given period.
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, it is notable that the close
price
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 in
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stock
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the stock
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 market remained un from January 2006 to December 2010. In the early observation period,
Outokumpu
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firstly
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first
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 recorded its share
price
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 roughly at 12
Euro
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. By June 2006, the
price
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 significantly went up almost
trippled
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tripled
 approximately at 31
Euro
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.
Although
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 the
stock
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price
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 went down throughout
one-year
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a one-year
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 period after its significant increase,
Outokumpu
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's share
price
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 bounced back and
noted
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was noted
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 for its close
price
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of
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roughly
at
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apply
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30
Euro
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 in
the
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apply
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early
of
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apply
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2008.
Afterward
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, the market condition seemed against
to
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apply
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Outokumpu
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 company and it caused the biggest
dropped
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drop
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 they ever recorded, from 30
Euro
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 to roughly 7
Euro
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 in June 2008. After the
worse
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worst
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 trend, the
stock
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price
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 of
Outokumpu
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 started to increase with slight
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fluctuation
fluctuations
 in the process and closed its
stock
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price
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 at approximately 7
Euro
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 in December 2010.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words outokumpu, stock, price, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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