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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform
that
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you that
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l
 have
problem
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a problem
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 agreement with my roommate. I think it is difficult to compromise their
behaviors
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behaviours
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 in the room. I feel
discomfortable
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uncomfortable
 because he always plays music too loud
then
l
 can not sleep well every night. If
l
warm
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wanted
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 him to turn down the music, he
was
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would be
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 angry
to
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with
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 me.
Therefore
,
l
 can not share
room
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a room
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 with him, so
l
 want to change my room.
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logical structure
Ensure that your letter has a clear logical structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs each containing a singular main point, and a conclusion.
greeting and closing
Always include a sign-off to your letter, such as 'Yours sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully', depending on whether you know the name of the person you are writing to.
single idea per paragraph
Work on developing each main idea in separate paragraphs for clearer organization and to make it easier for the reader to follow.
complete response
Make sure to adequately cover all parts of the task. In this case, explain the situation in more detail, elaborate on why it is difficult to work, and provide clear suggestions on what kind of accommodation you would prefer.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a formal and polite tone throughout the letter to suit the context of writing to an authority figure such as the accommodation officer.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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