You recently bought a piece of computer equipment but it was broken. You work at home and you need this equipment for your work. Write a letter to the shop manager. In this letter: • describe the problem with the equipment • explain how this problem is affecting your work • say what you would like the shop to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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letter to bring your attention
about
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the
last
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camera
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I
purchaed
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purchased
from your store on 12
of
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December 2023 My name is Sarah and I am
constant
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customer at your store. Being with I received the
camera
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on the 13 of December 2023 unfortunately when I
open
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the package I found it damaged instantly , I tried to
tackel
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tackle
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problem immediately but I couldn’t find the solution and the
camera
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needs to
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. I need the
camera
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instantly for my work I am
photographer
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a photographer
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I have several occasions
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week and I have lots of
working
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to do as you know
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is a critical part of my work
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I have to get the
camera
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this
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week to make sure my appointment with customers . I would be grateful to come up with a new
camera
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or repair the
camera
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, contact me if you have any questions. Yours faithfully, Sarah
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Coherence Cohesion
Ensure proper use of punctuation, spacing, and paragraphs to enhance the letter's readability.
Coherence Cohesion
Develop your ideas in a clear, logical sequence with topic sentences that guide the reader through your arguments.
Coherence Cohesion
Work on creating a proper structure, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
Task Achievement
Use varied and accurate vocabulary to present your issues and requests professionally.
Task Achievement
Focus on addressing all aspects of the task, elaborating on each point with specifics, consequences, and clear resolutions.
Task Achievement
A formal tone is necessary for this kind of correspondence. Avoid casual language and ensure formalities are observed.
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