The line graph shows visits to and from UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
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This
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line chart illustrates, The
visitors
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to and from the United Kingdom in a two-decade period between 1979 and 1999.
while
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The bar chart depicts, The most nations that are visited by United Kingdom citizens. From an
overall
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perspective, By 1999 tourism by British residents increased sharply to become the highest of 55
million
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people . Regarding the line chart, In 1979 tourism by
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foreign citizens to the UK began with 10
million
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visitors
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,
Then
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, increased gradually until hit its peak in 1999 with 28
million
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tourists. Turning to the most preferred destination to the British, France comes in first place with 11
million
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visitors
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. The second in rank was Spain with 9
million
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tourists from Great Britain. Turkey was the least popular among UK residents with 3
million
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people in 1999. The USA and Greece had less than 5
million
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British
visitors
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, Which were 4 and 3
million
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respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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