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At schools, students should only be taught academic knowledge to pass the exams, and skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should be learned from family and friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#schools #students #exams #skills #cookery #woodwork #friends
The principal focus of schools should be
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 grooming academically sound students who excel at exams
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 skills in catering, sewing
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dresses and carpentry should be developed from practice from loved ones. I am in complete disagreement with
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 statement because the purpose of education is
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 well-grounded in all areas and
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 of vocational skills at institutions could offer better expertise. The sole aim of every school is to educate students and not to limit them to examination success. If students are taught to only ace tests, they
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 not be sound in other aspects and might not be ready for the real world where being handy and craftsy can be quite beneficial for them.
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 of frequent food and nutrition
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 in Nigerian Secondary Schools, many sons can assist their mothers in the kitchen because they are taught
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essential survival
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. Making these practices part of the curriculum can mean being exceptionally good at them. With the organisation of a class setting,necessary textbooks and a qualified instructor in some of these vocations, many of the learners may turn these into their professional trades and generate regular income as opposed to merely observing at home.
For instance
, because of the introduction of Trade into the Nigerian curriculum, one of my classmates in High School learnt photography and is now a professional photographer- the CEO of Scenema Pictures and is
also
 a Civil Engineer. In conclusion, the inclusion of practical skills could help scholars pursue alternate professional career paths and could
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 make them more mentally sound and prepare them to take the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic knowledge
  • exams
  • cookery
  • dressmaking
  • woodwork
  • practical skills
  • well-rounded education
  • beneficial
  • integration
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