The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.

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pie chart depicts the six different sources which were used in

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energy production during the time period of 1985 and 2003. The data was calibrated in percentage.

Overall

, oil had the

hightest

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highest

contribution amongst all of the available resources in both years

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hydrogen was

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reliable means of energy.

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, the usage of oil

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dropped

from 52% to 39% in the

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year, still it was

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consumed profoundly in both

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years

whereas

the

proportation

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proportion

of hydrogen

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constant at 4%.

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to it, natural gas's

cousumption

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consumption

had a good hike, it was

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% increase in 2003 and

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the second most used source amongst the given ones

while

nuclear and coal showed a small

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fluctuation

between the given years.

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