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Nowadays animal experiments are widely use to develop new medicine and to test the safety of other products. Many people argue that these should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animal to suffer from, while others are in favour of them as they bring move benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Television
 has long been a subject of debate,
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someone
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some
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 arguing
that is
 a mere waste of
time
while
 others don't think like that. The majority of houses have
at a least
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 one
television
. Let's discuss more about the pros and cons
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time
 with
television
.
Firtly
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Firstly
,
television
 can give for who
watches
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 information and knowledge. News channels keep us updated about
is
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happing
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 around the world, with a view of global perspective. You can
also
 see during the news the weather conditions for the next day or week.
This
 is important if you have plans to
make
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a
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 outside activity. Educational programs bring
to
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us insights
of
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 science, history and culture, it all without you
leave
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 your sofa.
Secondly
, it is a means of relaxation, after you have a difficult day you can sit down and relax watching a documentary,
laughting
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laughing
with
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 a comedy or being emotional with a drama.
Moreover
,
the
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television
also
 brings the family together whether seeing a
sport
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 program or a TV show on
sundays
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. On the other point of view is important to say that
staying
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 a lot of
time
stopped
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watching TV can leave
to
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you to a sedentary life, but it
is depend
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of
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you
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your
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 lifestyle. Moderation is the key. In conclusion,
television
 is not a
time
-wasting and can provide
lot
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 of information, knowledge and fun.
Manager
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 your
time
 in front of is the key to
keep
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 a healthy lifestyle.
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Task Achievement
Your introduction should provide a clear overview of the topic and a brief mention of both viewpoints before stating your own opinion.
Task Achievement
Be mindful of the essay prompt and ensure that both views are discussed equally and your opinion is clearly stated if the question requires it.
Task Achievement
While you present a number of ideas, they must be further expanded upon with clear examples and explanations.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your essay has clear paragraphing with each paragraph containing a central idea and subsequent supporting sentences.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices appropriately to help with the flow of ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Correct the grammatical and spelling errors that are present in your writing. These can significantly hinder the clarity of your argument and constitute a source of misunderstanding.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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