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Band 3

Nowadays animal experiments are widely use to develop new medicine and to test the safety of other products. Many people argue that these should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animal to suffer from, while others are in favour of them as they bring move benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#experiments #medicine #test #safety #products #people #favour #move #humanity
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 has long been a subject of debate,
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someone
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 a mere waste of
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 others don't think like that. The majority of houses have
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 information and knowledge. News channels keep us updated about
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 around the world, with a view of global perspective. You can
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 see during the news the weather conditions for the next day or week.
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a
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 outside activity. Educational programs bring
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us insights
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 science, history and culture, it all without you
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 your sofa.
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, it is a means of relaxation, after you have a difficult day you can sit down and relax watching a documentary,
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laughing
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 a comedy or being emotional with a drama.
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television
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also
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 brings the family together whether seeing a
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 program or a TV show on
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. On the other point of view is important to say that
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stopped
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watching TV can leave
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you to a sedentary life, but it
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of
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you
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 lifestyle. Moderation is the key. In conclusion,
television
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 is not a
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-wasting and can provide
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 of information, knowledge and fun.
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 in front of is the key to
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 a healthy lifestyle.
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Task Achievement
Your introduction should provide a clear overview of the topic and a brief mention of both viewpoints before stating your own opinion.
Task Achievement
Be mindful of the essay prompt and ensure that both views are discussed equally and your opinion is clearly stated if the question requires it.
Task Achievement
While you present a number of ideas, they must be further expanded upon with clear examples and explanations.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your essay has clear paragraphing with each paragraph containing a central idea and subsequent supporting sentences.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices appropriately to help with the flow of ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Correct the grammatical and spelling errors that are present in your writing. These can significantly hinder the clarity of your argument and constitute a source of misunderstanding.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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