The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
The given bar graph illustrates the outcome of shopping and consuming
coffee
and
tea
in five Australian urban
cities
. Here If we looked for a glance , we can see that most
people
went to a
cafe
for
coffee
or
tea
in
last
Correct article usage
the last
show examples
4 weeks. As for every
city
Add a comma
city,
show examples
we can see that most
people
are going to
cafe
shop
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shops
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for their
coffee
or
tea
except
Adelaide
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in Adelaide
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where a little most
people
buy instant
coffee
which is 50 percent in
last
Correct article usage
the last
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4 weeks.
On the other hand
,
people
of
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from
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the other four
cities
Sydney, Brisbane, and Hobart all went to
cafe
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cafes
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and their percentage is over 60%, though Brisbane\'s
people
also
went to
cafe
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cafes
show examples
but their percentage is 56%.
Moreover
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Moreover,
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we can see that buying instant
coffee
is the second most popular in other all countries where Brisbane is 53%, Hobart was a little more
that
Correct word choice
than
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Brisbane which is 54%, And others usage is below 50%. Though the buying of fresh
coffee
in
last
Correct article usage
the last
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four weeks is low in all
cities
but
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apply
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in all of them the
people
of
sydney
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Sydney
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buy 44% , Melbourn 42%, and others are below 40%.
At
Rephrase
Lastly
show examples
last
,
it is clear that
people
of
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from
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all those
cities
spend
their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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most money
in
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apply
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going
in
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to
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a
cafe
and
buy
Wrong verb form
buying
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coffee
or
tea
where
people
of Melbourne
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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the majority, and buying
of
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apply
show examples
fresh
coffee
is the lowest in all
cities
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, cities, people, cafe with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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