The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
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The given bar graph illustrates the outcome of shopping and consuming
coffee
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and
tea
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in five Australian urban
cities
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. Here If we looked for a glance , we can see that most
people
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went to a
cafe
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for
coffee
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or
tea
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in
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last
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the last
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4 weeks. As for every
city
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city,
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we can see that most
people
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are going to
cafe
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shop
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shops
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for their
coffee
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or
tea
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except
Adelaide
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in Adelaide
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where a little most
people
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buy instant
coffee
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which is 50 percent in
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last
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the last
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4 weeks.
On the other hand
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,
people
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of
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from
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the other four
cities
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Sydney, Brisbane, and Hobart all went to
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cafe
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cafes
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and their percentage is over 60%, though Brisbane\'s
people
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also
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went to
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cafe
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cafes
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but their percentage is 56%.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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we can see that buying instant
coffee
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is the second most popular in other all countries where Brisbane is 53%, Hobart was a little more
that
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than
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Brisbane which is 54%, And others usage is below 50%. Though the buying of fresh
coffee
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in
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last
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the last
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four weeks is low in all
cities
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but
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apply
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in all of them the
people
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of
sydney
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Sydney
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buy 44% , Melbourn 42%, and others are below 40%.
At
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Lastly
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last
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,
it is clear that
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people
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of
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from
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all those
cities
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spend
their
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apply
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most money
in
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apply
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going
in
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to
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a
cafe
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and
buy
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buying
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coffee
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or
tea
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where
people
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of Melbourne
is
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are
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the majority, and buying
of
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apply
show examples
fresh
coffee
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is the lowest in all
cities
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, cities, people, cafe with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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