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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie chart shows data about
anthropology
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alumni
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alumni's
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career
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careers
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 after
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graduates
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graduating
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 from one university, and the table displays
range
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the range
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salaries
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of salaries
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 of
anthropology
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graduates
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 in some sectors.
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, most
of
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apply
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anthropology
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graduates
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taking
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take
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 full-time
work
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 after finishing their
study
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studies
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while
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 sector offers the highest rate of salary
form
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for
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 them. Based on the pie chart, the most popular destinations for
anthropology
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graduates
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 were full-time
work
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 with 52%, followed by part-time
work
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 at 15% and unemployed at 12%.
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, full-time postgrad study at 8% and
part time
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part-time
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work
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 + postgrad study at 5% were the least options opted by the alumni.
According to
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 the table, there are various
income
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incomes
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 of
anthropogy
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anthropology
graduates
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depend
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depending
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 on their type of employment.
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, 50%
people
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of people
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 working in
government
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the government
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 sector
earns
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earn
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 more than 100.000
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 only 30% of private
companies
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companies'
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 employee could reach the same level.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words anthropology, graduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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