the chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented accomodation in Enhland and Wales between 1918 and 2011

the chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented accomodation in Enhland and Wales between 1918 and 2011
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compares and contrasts the
percentage
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of two types
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of accomodation
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accomodation
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accommodation
which are owned and rented in England and Wales from 1918 and 2011.
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,
while
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the
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of
households
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in owned
accommodation
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had increased
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percentage
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of
households
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in rented
accommodation
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had declined
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of
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two years during
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period. In 1918, there was a huge difference between
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in
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owned and rented,
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the
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of rented
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75%, the
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of owned
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about 25%.
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coming to 1939 and 1953 which had nearly the same
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,
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interval
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,
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rate became almost 70% and
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the owned
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rate
icreased
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increased
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30%. The differences
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percentage
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continiued
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continued
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, in 1971, it equated
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50%.
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time,
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the
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of
households
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in owned
accommodation
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increased to 60%,
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house rate fell to 40%. The
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of
households
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in rented
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remained the same
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which was at about 30% in 1991 and 2001 but
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it increased slightly to 40% in 2011. The
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of
households
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in owned
accommodation
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was almost 60% in 2011.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households, accommodation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 11 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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