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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the average weekly consumption structure
from
Change preposition
of
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 families
in
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particular
Add an article
the particular
a particular
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 country in 1968 and
in
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apply
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2018. In
generally
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general
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, the graph shows that the proportion on spending of food, housing, and leisure were
top
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the top
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 three of
households
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households'
household's
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cost
Correct subject-verb agreement
costs
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. Especially,
family
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families
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 spent much more money on food in 1968. Compared with the other two highest
spenditure
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expenditure
 of family, the figure
of
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for
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 food was distinguished in 1968,
was
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which was
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 30% of weekly income,
while
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the
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apply
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transportation was 10% and
the
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apply
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leisure was around 8%. It is obvious that the data
of
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for
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 fuel
and
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apply
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power and personal goods spending were very low in both two years, and they all never
overtake
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overtook
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 10% in both years and they were less than 5% in 2018. The weekly cost of house goods
in contrast
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by
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to
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 other consumed item
were
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was
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 very special, those
percentage
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percentages
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 were the same in 1968 and 2018 with approximately 7%.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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