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The two plans show Pancha village in 2005 and 2015. Write a summary of the information. Select and report the main features, and make comparisons when necessary.

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Details regarding the development of Pancha
village
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 from 2005 to 2015 are pictorially portrayed in the diagram. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
this
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 residential area witnessed relatively extensive modifications and transformations, the most notable of which is the renovation of
road
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the road
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, the expansion of the pagoda and school and the emergence of transmission towers. On the west side of
this
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village
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, most houses were upgraded from old antennas to
satellites
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satellite
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 receivers. In the south-west, the market was expanded and better reorganized
while
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 the telecommunication towers
was
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 erected to seize the space. In the middle of Pancha
village
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, a two-lane roadway was built with the roadside electricity poles to the west, replacing
for
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apply
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the originally dirt road. With respect to the eastern side of the
village
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, the primary school had undergone a renovation to accommodate a secondary school. To the south, two of three houses
was
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 demolished to be vacant.
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, the pagoda grew in size with
additional
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an additional
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of
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apply
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a
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building.
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In your essay, aim to enhance coherence by organizing your ideas more logically. Create distinct paragraphs for different aspects of the changes, ensuring clear progression from one idea to the next without abrupt jumps. Use cohesive devices appropriately to illustrate the connections between points.
task achievement
Ensure that your essay achieves the task by fully responding to all elements required. This includes a clear summary of the main features, comprehensive coverage of the changes between the two time points, and relevant comparisons. Work on developing a more concise overview and streamlined reporting of the features without redundancies or omissions.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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