The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or college lecturer. Write at least 150

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The bar chart illustrates

average

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an average

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number of working

hours

in a

week

divided by eight groups of

job

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jobs

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while

the pie chart depicts the

stress

level between the professionals.

Overall

it is clear that

entrepreneur has the highest number of working

hours

in a

week

whereas

lecturers

has

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the least.

However

, in terms of

stress

level,

lectures

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lecturers

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are

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the most who

has

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experienced

stress

in their job,

while

programmers

has

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merely tension. In terms of working time,

businessman

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businessmen

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spend almost 75

hours

in a

week

, followed by movie producers with just over 50

hours

and doctors

had

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approximately 50

hours

Moreover

, authors consume more than 25

hours

which

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higher than software engineers, lawyers, and Chefs. Lecturers,

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the least, accounted for under 25

hours

for working

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in a

week

In contrast

, lecturers are experiencing more

stress

in their employment (25%) even though their working

hours

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minimum

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compared to other occupations.

Next,

movie producers

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the second position with 25%, followed by doctors, executives, and chefs with 15%, 11%, and 10%, respectively.

However

, lawyers and writers have the same rates, and programmers

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only 5%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, stress with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

186 words

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