You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.
In
contemporary
world, there are many developed and poor Add an article
the contemporary
countries
and lots of time the wealthy countries
give money to developing or poverty countries
for
solve Change preposition
to
the
their many problems Remove the article
apply
such
as financial, health, aducation
system etc. problems. Correct your spelling
education
According to
many people
Add a comma
people,
this
type of solve
is not beneficial for them Replace the word
solution
on the other hand
some people think about
Change preposition
apply
this
solution is very crucial. I'll explain my opinion in this
essay with my example.
First and foremost, in the modern era, many developed countries
have a lot of industrial source
and technological power Change to a plural noun
sources
while
some poor countries
can not find a little something for eating
. The powerful Change preposition
to eat
countries
who awaraness
on the poor region Correct your spelling
awareness
they
have always been Correct pronoun usage
apply
pay
attention Change the verb form
paying
paid
for
their necessaries. Most of the pivotal aid is not Change preposition
to
temporary
solution, it Add an article
a temporary
is
might be just only permanent Unnecessary verb
apply
solve
Replace the word
solution
such
as funding a company, building
a factory as Correct word choice
or building
Correct article usage
a mean
mean
Correct subject-verb agreement
means
as provide
opportunities for work. Change preposition
of providing
For instance
, according to
the a
German study, many poor Choose an article
the
a
countries
consume the things which other developed countries'
sending rapidly and Change noun form
countries
this
couldn't remain the
next months, it can be beneficial but it can not Change preposition
for the
enough
for both poor individuals and new times.
Add a missing verb
be enough
Secondly
, many supporters of the idea of provide
Change the form of the verb
providing
the
aid Correct article usage
apply
for
poor Change preposition
to
countries
is
should Unnecessary verb
apply
be
continue in during the Unnecessary verb
apply
everytime
, not only one month or one year but Replace the word
every time
also
it should be everytime
. Replace the word
every time
For example
, if we can encourage the poverty contries
they can Correct your spelling
countries
be stay
Change the verb form
stay
life
.
In conclusion, rich Correct your spelling
alive
countries
aware
of the Add a missing verb
are aware
requirement
of poverty territories but lots of time they can not enough for their needs. Fix the agreement mistake
requirements
However
governments ought to agree with all Add a comma
However,
assosiation
for every Correct your spelling
association
aids
and Change to a singular noun
aid
may be
they should think about consider starting a business for them.Correct your spelling
maybe
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