You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

In
contemporary
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world, there are many developed and poor
countries
and lots of time the wealthy
countries
give money to developing or poverty
countries
for
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to
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solve
the
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their many problems
such
as financial, health,
aducation
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education
system etc. problems.
According to
many
people
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people,
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this
type of
solve
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solution
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is not beneficial for them
on the other hand
some people think
about
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this
solution is very crucial. I'll explain my opinion in
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essay with my example. First and foremost, in the modern era, many developed
countries
have a lot of industrial
source
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and technological power
while
some poor
countries
can not find a little something
for eating
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to eat
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. The powerful
countries
who
awaraness
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awareness
on the poor region
they
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apply
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have always been
pay
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paying
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attention
for
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to
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their necessaries. Most of the pivotal aid is not
temporary
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solution, it
is
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might be just only permanent
solve
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such
as funding a company,
building
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or building
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a factory as
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a mean
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mean
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means
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as provide
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of providing
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opportunities for work.
For instance
,
according to
the a
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the
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German study, many poor
countries
consume the things which other developed
countries'
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countries
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sending rapidly and
this
couldn't remain
the
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next months, it can be beneficial but it can not
enough
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be enough
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for both poor individuals and new times.
Secondly
, many supporters of the idea of
provide
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providing
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the
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aid
for
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to
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poor
countries
is
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should
be
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continue in during the
everytime
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every time
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, not only one month or one year but
also
it should be
everytime
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every time
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.
For example
, if we can encourage the poverty
contries
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countries
they can
be stay
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life
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alive
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. In conclusion, rich
countries
aware
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are aware
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of the
requirement
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requirements
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of poverty territories but lots of time they can not enough for their needs.
However
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governments ought to agree with all
assosiation
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association
for every
aids
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aid
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and
may be
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maybe
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they should think about consider starting a business for them.
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