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The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.

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The supplied graphs illustrate detailed data about how many percentages were spent on categories by a common family in Great Britain in 2010 and 2013. As can be seen, even though the amount of earnings witnessed a sequential decrease, the sum of money used for food and clothing,
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, tediously increased. In detail, we can see that the revenue went from 29000 to 25000 between 2010 and 2013. Simultaneously, the spending rose from 14000 to 15000. Noticeably, the group with the most expense is meat and fish for 2010 and fruit and vegetables for 2013, with 29% and 30% respectively. Clothing only occupied 15% of the first chart and 13% of the second. For the breakdown, the rest was spent on milk-based goods and other products. In 2010, 12% and 18% were allocated to those two categories. Almost identical to 2010, 16% contributed to the consumption of cow-related goods group and 18% to the other food group.
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coherence cohesion
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Clarify your ideas by providing a clear and comprehensive explanation that directly relates to the data provided in the charts or pictures.
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While it is good to use specific examples, also focus on summarizing the overall trends and comparisons. Avoid being overly detailed with minor numerical data unless it is significant to your analysis.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average income
  • spending habits
  • proportion
  • cost of living
  • economic changes
  • cultural factors
  • standard of living
  • economic health
  • leftover income
  • savings
  • expenses
  • financial trends
  • value for money
  • economic forecasts
  • significant increase/decrease
  • spending patterns
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