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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart presents the sum of visiting
tourist
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tourists
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 at one of
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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, the graph compares
island
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 visitors based on
accomodation
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accommodation
 options: staying on cruise ships or on the
island
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, with additional information
of
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on
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total
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the total
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 number.
Furthermore
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, all variables increased for the observed 7 years. From 2010 to 2017, the number of people who decided to have a holiday
at
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on
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 that particular Caribbean
island
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 surged from 1 million to 3.5 million. The main growth was people who joined the cruise ships who
also
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seen dramatically
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 increment to 8 times, from 0.25
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millions
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million
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 to 2
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millions
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million
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. In
contray
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contrast
 to that, despite
of
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having
increament
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increased
 from 0.75
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millions
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million
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 to 1.5
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millions
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million
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 in that 7
years
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year
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 timespan, people who
choose
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chose
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 to stay
in
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stable in the
number
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numbers
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 from 2013 to 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, millions with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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