It would be of great benefit if all citizens undertook voluntary work within their own communities. Discuss the effects of such voluntary activities.

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some voluntary work by every individual in the community has beneficial sides from different
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and negative
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by citizens. One of the main drawbacks of
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volunteering
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is that they
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don't
receive any salary or wages which is more important in the current economy.
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, as people get older, their demands
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increasing simultaneously so
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one of the best ways to meet these needs is to earn money. Another negative result is that people who work voluntarily would cause
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redundancy in the different organizations
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within
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,
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provided with
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low salary with voluntary residents
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higher unemployment rate in the country. Considering above mentioned cons effects,
on the other hand
, working
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has a boon result in many different ways.
Firstly
, there are some works or jobs that nobody wants to do
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low payment
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the goverment
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government
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have been done voluntarily by the individuals.
Secondly
, working as
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a volunteer
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is fostering
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community spirit and unity by bringing people together for a common cause.
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, generating and discussing various ideas between them lead to
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relationship and keeping tight. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against getting some work
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voluntarily
by citizens, it would be beneficial from multiple
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perspective
perspectives
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Voluntary work
  • Community spirit
  • Common cause
  • Amenities
  • Collective efforts
  • Local shelters
  • Life skills
  • Employability
  • Public services
  • Supplementing
  • Empathy
  • Social awareness
  • Altruism
  • Civic engagement
  • Grassroots movements
  • Non-profit sector
  • Philanthropy
  • Volunteerism
  • Community-driven
  • Social cohesion
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