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In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#books #internet #outweigh
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Nowadays,
Internet
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 technologies are becoming more and more popular, they help people to do everything in their daily life.
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, it contains
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 all over the world, and people everywhere
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with
Wi-fi
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a Wi-fi
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 connection are allowed to use it. The major advantage of the
internet
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 is its accessibility. Unlike
books
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, which
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 not available everywhere
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.
This
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 convenience is helpful for those who want to learn on the go.Another positive aspect is the
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 updates provided by the
internet
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.Different from
books
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, which can become outdated, online sources can keep users informed about the latest developments.
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, now
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internet
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 can be useful and helpful especially for students because of the fast
developing
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 of artificial intelligence, it can help with writing essays, researching for presentations
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etc. The other side is varying levels of reliability on the
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 sources.
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books
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 thoroughly edited , online content can range from accurate to highly questionable. Navigating through
this
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 sea of
information
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 requires digital literacy skills to identify between credible and misleading sources. I believe that
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in
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 the
internet
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 is more useful and comfortable to use than in
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books
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 and the advantages outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of digital
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.The World Wide Web
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has developed
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everyday
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 and people can search
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for needed
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information
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 faster and faster,
usually
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it takes less than 1 minute because
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 google is the most famous research system and it
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 data just in
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Introduction and Conclusion
Work on creating a clear introduction and a conclusion that restates your position, directly addressing the question of whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Paragraph Structure
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that ideas within paragraphs and across the essay are logically ordered and well connected.
Supporting Examples
Support your main points with specific examples rather than making general statements. More specific details and examples lend credibility to your arguments.
Balanced Argument
Aim to present a balanced view by discussing the disadvantages in more depth, providing support for your arguments on how the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Grammar and Vocabulary
Watch for grammatical and vocabulary errors which can impact the clarity and professional tone of your writing.
Conclusion Development
Develop the conclusion further to summarize your main points and clearly state your opinion, giving reasons for your judgment.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning
  • Virtual libraries
  • Cyberspace
  • Search engine literacy
  • Critical evaluation skills
  • Open-source information
  • Data mining
  • Intellectual property
  • Digital preservation
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