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The charts below show the percentageof volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.

The charts below show the percentageof volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.
#show #percentageof #volunteers #organizations
The pie chart gives data related to
proportion
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the proportion
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 of volunteers based on organization types in 2008 and 2014.
Overall
, some categories
such
 as
Enviromental
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environmental
 and Art
were
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declined over the period
while
Enviromental
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environmental
 and Others categories
indicates
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 an
increased
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.
According to
 the data, Educational
was
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 the highest percentage of volunteers by group with 24% in 2008. Six years later, the proportion of it showed a drop from 24% to 17%.
Similarly
, the data for Art members
also
had shown
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showed
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 a decline
by
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of
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 6%.
In contrast
, environmental
activist
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activists
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 shared an increase in the percentage from 21% in 2008 to 29% in 2014. In 2014, Health Care displayed a
slightly
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 increase at around 8% which is 1% higher than
percentage
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the percentage
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 in 2008.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, a significant
rose
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also
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was also
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 witnessed in
sport team
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sports teams
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 that involved 10% in 2014 compared to 15% involvement in 2008.
Dispite
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Despite
of
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these
increase
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increases
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,
Others
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the Others
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 category showed a drop from 15% to 9% in 2014.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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