The diagram below shows the production and processing of milk production for commercial sale. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagram below shows the production and processing of milk production for commercial sale. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words
The diagram shows how the
process
of producing
milk
is carried out, which involves the use of various equipment. As can be clearly seen from the picture, there are many stages in the whole production
process
, beginning with cows grazing and ending with selling in supermarkets and shops. Looking at the image more closely, one can see that, the first stage is when cows eat grass and graze in fields.
Then
the cows are milked twice a day in a factory.
After
this
stage is complete, the
milk
will be placed in the refrigerator to freeze. After that, the trucks will still deliver
milk
to the manufactory. Once transportation has finished, the production
process
of cheese, cream, and butter will be
process
started. At the same time, the
milk
will be pasteurized and packaged by machinery immediately
afterward
Change the spelling
afterwards
show examples
. Once the final step has been completed, the goods will be sold in supermarkets and shops.
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