The diagram below shows the production and processing of milk production for commercial sale. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagram below shows the production and processing of milk production for commercial sale. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words
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The diagram shows how the
process
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of producing
milk
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is carried out, which involves the use of various equipment. As can be clearly seen from the picture, there are many stages in the whole production
process
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, beginning with cows grazing and ending with selling in supermarkets and shops. Looking at the image more closely, one can see that, the first stage is when cows eat grass and graze in fields.
Then
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the cows are milked twice a day in a factory.
After
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this
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stage is complete, the
milk
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will be placed in the refrigerator to freeze. After that, the trucks will still deliver
milk
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to the manufactory. Once transportation has finished, the production
process
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of cheese, cream, and butter will be
process
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started. At the same time, the
milk
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will be pasteurized and packaged by machinery immediately
afterward
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. Once the final step has been completed, the goods will be sold in supermarkets and shops.
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