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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.
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The given table depicts data about sources of
police
 budget in a particular area in England,
while
 the pie chart illustrates
about
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three categories of spending; Salaries, Technology, Buildings and transport within two years (2017 and 2018). At a glance, the majority of the
police
 financial resources are contributed by national government and local taxes as
it
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can be seen from the table. Meanwhile,
the
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a
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 big portion of the money spent was
for
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on
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 salaries. On the table, from 2017 until 2018, the biggest contribution
for
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to
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 the
police
 budget was
done
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made
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 by
national
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the national
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 government with 175.5
m
 to 177.8
m
.
In addition
, the second big contribution came from local taxes with 91.2
m
 in 2017 and 102.3
m
 in 2018. On the pie chart, during 2017, the biggest portion of spending went to salaries of the
police
 officers and
staf
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staff
 accounted for 75% and in 2018 it experienced a slight
decrese
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decrease
 to 69%.
Moreover
, the usage of finance for Technology
and
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Buildings and transport in 2017
8
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was 8
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% and 17% respectively.
In addition
, there was a
remaind
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remained
 steady
for
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money spent on Buildings and transport (17%) in 2018 but a significant improvement
on
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in
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budget
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the budget
a budget
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 for technology (14%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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