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the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015
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The chart gives information about various kinds of
export
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exports
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 worth
of
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one nation in 2015 and 2016.
Table
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The table
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 illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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 change in value in 2015 and 2016.
Overall
,it is seen that
values
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the values
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 of all types of
export
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exports
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 increased in 2016 as compared to 2015 except
of
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for
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 gems and jewellery. In
first
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 chart,
taxtiles
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textiles
textile
export
 earned 6 billion $ more in 2016(25b$) than
2015
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in 2015
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(31b$).After textiles petroleum products showed increased
earning
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earnings
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 in 2016
63billions $
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63 billion dollars
 as compared to
61billions
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61 billion dollars
 in 2015.
Same
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The same
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 happened with engineered goods,their earning surpased
62billions $
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62 billion dollars
 in 2016 which was at 57
billions
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billion
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 $ in 2015.
However
 agricultural products showed equal
export
earning
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earnings
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(31 billion $) in both 2015 and 2016 .
On the other hand
,germs and jewellery
export
earning
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earnings
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 decreased from
43billions$
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43 billion
 (2015) to 41
billions
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billion
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 $ in 2016.
Table
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The table
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 illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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 change in value from 2015 to 2016.Percentage change in value showed positives in all types of
export
 (Petroleum 3%,Textiles 15.24%,Engineered goods 8.5% and agricultural products 0.81%) except gems and jewellery.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports, categories, value, goods, services
  • Trends, increase, decrease, percentage, compared
  • Significant, minimal, fluctuation, remained stable
  • Domestic product, international trade, economic indicators
  • Manufacturing, agriculture, technology, textiles
  • Revenue, economic growth, trade deficit
  • Forecast, predict, anticipate, implications
  • Global market, exchange rate, competitiveness
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