The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who attended four different attractions in Brighton.

The graph depicts the percentage of tourists who

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to England to visit four distinct landmarks in Brighton between 1980 and 2010.

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, the Pavilion and the Pier proportion increased gradually throughout the

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;

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the Art Gallery and the Festival experienced a downward trend in the

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. In 1980, the number of tourists exploring the Pier in Brighton started at around 10% and was the lowest figure of all destinations. It had gradually increased since 1980 despite the fluctuation and reached around 20%

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.

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, the Pavilion started at around 25% in 1980 and had its peak in 1995 at slightly under 50%, before

finally

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declining in 2000 and

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decreasing till the

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at around 32%. The number of tourists who come to the Festival remained steady for 30 years since 1980.

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, the rate slightly declined

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end

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just under 10%.

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rate of visitors

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the Art Gallery in 1980 was around 20%, and it approached its peak in the next five years

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38%. Unfortunately, it kept declining till the

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and reached slightly under 10%, which

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lowest number of all in 2010.