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The following is the diagram of the mobile phone recycling process. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The given flow chart depicts the cradle-to-cradle procedure of recycling a handphone.
To begin
, the unwanted phone is collected from the consumers, which will be stored and forwarded to the machine dismantling and separation stages. During the dismantling process,
phone
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 and battery will be handled separately,
following
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 by
a
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mechanical or magnetic separation. The end-products from the separation stage include metal parts and wiring boards,
plastics
 and other
materials
. Both metal parts
and
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wiring boards, and
plastics
 have to undergo
further
 processing until they become reusable
materials
.
On the other hand
, the other
materials
 obtained from the process can be
resale
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resold
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 directly. For metal parts and wiring boards, as metals are embedded into those components, the copper will be smelted. At the same time, the precious metals will be refined
to
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 useful resources. Meanwhile,
plastics
 are going to be reprocessed to
lower grade
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plastics
 or incinerated to generate energy.
As a result
, the other
materials
 segregated from the phones,
together with
 the reusable metals and
lower grade
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plastics
 will be resale to generate income.
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