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your landlord is asking to increase the rent. why you think rent shouldn't be increased. what will you do if it is increased.

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Dear Smith, I am writing
this
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 letter to discuss
about
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apply
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proposed
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the proposed
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 surge in house
rent
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. I am sure you will consider my concerns in
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 matter.
First,
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as per my request
last
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 year you have agreed to renovate the flat. The flat was painted again, and
lighting
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the lighting
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 was reinstalled.
it
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 cost around 1500 pounds which you adjusted in monthly
rent
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. I agreed to that arrangement.
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, later in July
this
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 year water supply was disrupted, and
new
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 connection
is
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 installed. It cost around 500 pounds
this
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 was
also
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 adjusted in monthly
rent
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. Right now, I am paying 167 pounds more in monthly
rent
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. I think that
rent
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 should not be increased
further
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.
However
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, if you still think that
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rent
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the rent
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need
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 to be increased
then
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 I am sorry to say that I will not be able to pay the increased
rent
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. I will move out of your property with
1 month
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 notice.
As
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further
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 increase in
rent
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 will be unaffordable for me to pay. I look forward to your quick response. Yours Sincerely, Tim May
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coherence cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion: Use a variety of cohesive devices and transition words to better connect your ideas. Structure your paragraphs clearly with a topic sentence followed by supporting sentences and a concluding sentence. Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to enhance the logical flow of your reasons and arguments.
task achievement
For Task Achievement: While the response generally addresses the task, further detail and development of the ideas are necessary. Aim to express your points more comprehensively and consider additional arguments as to why the rent should not be increased, rather than solely focusing on past events. Include potential solutions or compromises that could be proposed to the landlord.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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