Every year several languages die out. Some people think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer language in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with opinion?

A lot of
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disappear every year. Some people believe that it is not significant since
this
will make their life easier when people use fewer
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in the world. I completely disagree with
this
idea, there are fundamental factors which affect badly way to cultural structure and human lives.
To begin
with, living with fewer
language
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may influence cultural structure
with
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different
way
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ways
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. The
language
is not only display
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to
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word
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but
olsa
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also
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on
culture
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where it
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.
Thus
, when
language
diminish
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diminishes
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day by day, people who
lived
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in where spoken
this
language
lose their tradition and their habits which they
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during
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thousands
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years. That's why, they can not
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with these huge changes rapidly, it
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some
challanges
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challenges
daily
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life. Take some countries,which are dominated
different
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by different
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country
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countries
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, they should not own their
language
because of restrictions and they
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protect and maintain
own
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their own
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cultural aspects.
Moreover
, speaking
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language
in
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everywhere may cause difficulties,
otherwise
bringing
easy
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an easy
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life. Languages are shaped by unifying with several factors which are
such
as weather
condition
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conditions
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and location. The meaning of everyone
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speaking
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same
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language
is ignoring these intrinsic elements.
For
this
reason, every single community may benefit
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languages' diversity but they
couldn't
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neglect their
language
completely.
This
can improve both
indivudual
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individuals
economically and
government
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the government
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economically more than speaking fewer
language
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languages
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.
In addition
, variety is crucial for individuals to develop their
lifes
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lives
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.
To conclude
, there are some acceptable negative consequences. If languages continue to disappear every year, it can lead to several difficulties.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic diversity
  • endangered languages
  • homogenization
  • cross-cultural communication
  • language preservation
  • intellectual diversity
  • cultural heritage
  • language revitalization
  • monolingual
  • multilingualism
  • dialects
  • ethnolinguistics
  • language policy
  • lingua franca
  • universal language
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