Every year several languages die out. Some people think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer language in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with opinion?
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languages
this
will make their life easier when people use fewer language
in the world. I completely disagree with Fix the agreement mistake
languages
this
idea, there are fundamental factors which affect badly way to cultural structure and human lives.
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words
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also
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live
this
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lose their tradition and their habits which they adapt
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during
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challenges
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individuals
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languages
In addition
, variety is crucial for individuals to develop their lifes
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lives
To conclude
, there are some acceptable negative consequences. If languages continue to disappear every year, it can lead to several difficulties.Submitted by ilknurkaradmn on
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