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Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organization. Others think that it is practical aid and advice that is needed. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

#people #countries #organization #aid #advice
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It is commonly believed that global
oranization
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organisations
 should assist financially and practically to developing countries. Many
person
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people
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claimed
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claim
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 they should get help only commercially ,
wheras
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whereas
 others
argued
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argue
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that advise
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advise
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advice
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 and
practial
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practical
 cooperation are more important for the country. I am convinced financial aid are main
ingridiants
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ingredient
 of a nation in
hard
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a hard
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 time
to develop
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developing
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 every section of the country. On the one hand ,
individuas
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individuals
individual
 think
practial
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practical
 and
avdice
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advice
 are better for the nation to build up its
piller
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power
 more
stroger
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stronger
 to address their own challenges and find out the best solution ,rather than relying on
oneside
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one side
 help.
For example
 , technical assistance and training
programe
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programmes
 help to
figer
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figure
 out their internal problem which is really urgent to develop their skill and knowledge to increase
facility
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the facility
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also
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and also
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growth
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the growth
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 of
a
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apply
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society.
Additionally
,
this
 kind of support
are
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is
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 relevant to
creat
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creating
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their
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a
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 sustainable system and
run
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 in
a
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the
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 long run.
On the other hand
, financial assistance
are
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is
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 significant for the nation in
hard
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a hard
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 time
what
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which
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 can not
deny
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 some one anyhow because food,
accomodation
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accommodation
,
education
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and education
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these
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apply
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are the main fact for people to live a
health
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 life. Namely,
pakistan
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Pakistan
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 is taking as a sample, all
type
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types
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 of
finnalcial
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financial
 help provided by
different
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the different
a different
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different
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apply
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developed
organization
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organizations
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 when they went through
a
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apply
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hardship because of
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the earthquack
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earthquack
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earthquake
.
Moreover
, society
get
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gets
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 cooperation instantly when they have enough money to
by
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buy
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 their
necessery iteams
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necessary items
such
 as to maintain their
crave
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craving
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 for food and
able
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be able
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 to lead e normal life . In conclusion,
i
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I
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 will go for financial
suppot
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support
 from
others
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other
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dveloped
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developed
 countries so that developing countries can meet their necessity now and
then
 though both
kind
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kinds
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 of assistance can make the balance properly for the society.
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