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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows
top
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the top
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 five countries where female
students
 choose to move for higher education in two time periods (1980 and 2015).
Overall
,
it is clear that
 Australia and France were the two most
in demand
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in-demand
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 countries for higher education in 1980
whereas
 in 2015, female
students
 chose Australia and the USA which had high
percentage
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percentages
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.
However
, South Korea had the lowest output in both
years
.
According to
 the bar chart, the output of
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and the USA in 1980,
were
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was
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 only between 35-40%
while
 there were a significant number of female
students
 in
year
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the year
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 2015
which
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apply
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approximately 55-58%.
Furthermore
, Australia became the most popular country which had almost 60% of women
attended
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 in both
years
. A large number of female
students
 went to France with a small difference between the
years
 of 1980 (50%) and 2015 (54%).
Nonetheless
, South Korea had the lowest number of female
students
 in
years
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the years
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 that are mentioned.
Also
, the percentage in 1980 was twice the result in 2015.
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