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Band 4

Some people say that individuals should change jobs during their working life often while others believe that doing the same job has advantages to individuals, companies, and society.

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There is no doubt that these days many
people
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difference
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 works during five years. The question is, what is the best way to
work
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work
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in many fields or
work
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one
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job
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this
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easy
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 I am going to discuss these ideas. First of all, many
people
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 think that
people
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 who get
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 jobs have many advantages.
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 many
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difference
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 works will give them
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difference
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expierence
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experiences
 in many fields which will assist them
to
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have
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 many skills. To illustrate,
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 careers
able
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 to make
people
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 extremely creative in any
job
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 around the world.
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 some companies did
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 to change the jobs of their
workers
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, And the result of
this
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 test was that the
worker
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workers
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 were more active and their skills were developed.
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, Many
people
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 argue that
one
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job
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 is critical for
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 who are keen
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 their subjects.
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 of the hardest
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job
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, so the teacher
could not
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cannot
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 change their
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, because it
need to
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requires
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 some special skills,
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,
One
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job
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 gives benefits
for
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to
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workers
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. To illustrate,
One
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job
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 will
make
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 the staff many
expierences
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experiences
 which help them to give the biggest ability to their
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 has
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 that both methods have many positive sides for companies,
workers
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 and society, and
choise
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choose
 the method of
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job
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the job
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 depends on the
workers
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 what they prefer.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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