The majority of news being reported is bad news. Why do you think this is? Should bad news be banned?

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integral
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life today; it is the prime source of
news
delivery to the residents. A segment of society believes that
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most
of
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news
are
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molded
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and the contents of it are not good enough,
therefore
it should be banned. There are several reasons for
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which will be disclosed
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the following paragraphs
along with
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this
hot topic.
First
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and foremost reason behind
this
concept is to gain popularity and increase fan following; most
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the
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news
channels and
newspaper
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delivered
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news
according to
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publics'
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taste.
For instance
,
news
related to looting, robbery,
vendalism
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vandalism
, murder and rape attract more attention than others,
therefore
,
press
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always preferred to release that
news
which aids them to collect more folk's attention.
Secondaly
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Secondly
, bad
news
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not need
deep dive
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reaserch
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research
and scrunity and reporting of
such
news
are easier in
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comparison
to others.
Nonetheless
, broadcasting of
news
should not be banned
completly
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completely
as it makes residents aware of
surronding
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surrounding
activities like theft and kidnapping.
However
, the contents of
such
reports should be
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scrutinised
thoroughly, by watching
such
news
, juveniles could tend to follow them which could be harmful to the whole society. To encapsulate,
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is crucial for
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residents
as it updates residents regarding
happens
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in the country and the outer world,
nevertheless
,
news
that impact human beings badly like serial killer should not be
broadcated
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broadcasted
on
high
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level, as it
impact
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paychological
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psychological
state of humans, and
esoecially
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especially
children would susceptible to repeat whatever they read on newspaper or watch on TVs.
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While the essay addresses the topic, the stance is not consistently clear. You are advised to express your position more explicitly throughout the essay and especially in the introduction and conclusion. Develop your main points by providing more detailed explanations and by exploring all parts of the prompt thoroughly, which includes discussing not only why there is a prevalence of bad news but also engaging with the suggestion about banning such news.
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The essay lacks a clear paragraph structure that logically organizes ideas. Begin with a clear topic sentence for each paragraph, followed by supporting sentences and a concluding sentence. Use cohesive devices more effectively to link ideas and paragraphs. Your essay should flow naturally from one point to the next, ensuring coherence through transitions and topic consistency. Consider revising sentences that do not directly contribute to the main topic, as they can distract from the overall cohesion of the essay.

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  • Negativity bias
  • Sensationalism
  • Ad revenue
  • Mental health
  • Censorship
  • Ethical considerations
  • Overexposure
  • Constructive news
  • Balanced reporting
  • Societal morale
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