the graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014

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From the line graph, we can see the average monthly rise or fall in how much copper, nickel and zinc cost throughout 2014.

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, nickel started with the highest percentage change of the three but ended with the lowest. Zinc started with the smallest change and ended with the highest, and copper prices fluctuated.

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The price

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dipped in June. In January, the

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of nickel was up 6% but

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dropped to negative three

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in June, ending the year with a one

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increase in both November and December. Copper began the year with an increase of 2% and by May, the

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(by slightly less than 1%). It rose again, by a percentage point in July, August and September. Zinc saw its most dramatic increase in February, with 3% and the

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fell in June (a 1 % decrease). The change was negative until October / November when it began to rise.

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