the graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014

the graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014
From the line graph, we can see the average monthly rise or fall in how much copper, nickel and zinc cost throughout 2014.
Overall
, nickel started with the highest percentage change of the three but ended with the lowest. Zinc started with the smallest change and ended with the highest, and copper prices fluctuated.
Price
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for all three
mentals
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metals
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dipped in June. In January, the
price
of nickel was up 6% but
this
dropped to negative three
percent
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per cent
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in June, ending the year with a one
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increase in both November and December. Copper began the year with an increase of 2% and by May, the
price
dropping
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(by slightly less than 1%). It rose again, by a percentage point in July, August and September. Zinc saw its most dramatic increase in February, with 3% and the
price
fell in June (a 1 % decrease). The change was negative until October / November when it began to rise.
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