The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows four varieties
kinds
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of kinds
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of recycling
materials
in a particular country.
Thi
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The
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materials
are
:
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apply
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paper and cardboard, glass containers,
aluminum
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aluminium
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cans and plastic from 1982 to 2010.
Overall
, there
are
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is
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a fluctuation in the
per cent
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percentage
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of the
materials
. Looking into more details, the aluminium cans are increased dramatically, and
they
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the
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he
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apply
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most striking figure was forty-five per cent in 2008. In the same way, the plastics
was
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were
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rising slowly, and the high figure was ten per cent in 2008. The glass containers
was
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declined from 1982 to 1988, after that,
it's
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it
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gradually
inclined
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increased
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until 2008.
The paper
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Paper
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and cardboard
were fluctuated
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fluctuated
have fluctuated
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,
moreover
, it was the
highes
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highest
materials
in between the rest of the other three recycled
materials
, and
it's
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it
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decreased from 1992 to 2008.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words materials with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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