Some people believe that the personal information of violent criminals should be made available to the public. Others think that this information should be protected. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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some, revealing the personal profile of violent criminals
is best for the
society but some believe it should be confidential to Correct article usage
apply
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view
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dangerous
criminals
because it will save their life
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others
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attacks
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Therefore
, by revealing their information
to public
, they can protect themself or Add an article
the public
others
when knowing the person
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information
about criminals
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On the other hand
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a violent
person
who like
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likes
life
after finishing his setence
may cause miserable Correct your spelling
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life
for them. Therefore
, if a criminal wish
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others
or will not able
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be able
Also
, they may have start
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started
his
criminal activity again because Correct pronoun usage
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To conclude
, there are those who think making criminals
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to start
life
in a societly
better to not reveal their Correct your spelling
society
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by keeping their activities secret.Submitted by me.sara22 on
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