Some people believe that the personal information of violent criminals should be made available to the public. Others think that this information should be protected. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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some, revealing the personal profile of violent

criminals

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is best for

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apply

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society but some believe it should be confidential to

public

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the public

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. In

this

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going discuss both

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views

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. On the one hand, people need to be aware of the

dangerouse

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dangerous

criminals

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because it will save their

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life

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lives

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and

others

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. if an individual

did

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a lot of violent activities

such

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as murder,

attacked

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other people and

damaged

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properties even after

recieve

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receiving

prison time will

definetly

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definitely

cause another

such

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activity in

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society.

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, by revealing their

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public

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the public

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, they can protect themself or

others

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when knowing the

person

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criminal

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a criminal

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, it

best

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for

public

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to provide

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information

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about

criminals

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, publishing

violent

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a violent

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record of a

person

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who

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likes

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to live a normal

life

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after finishing his

setence

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sentence

may cause miserable

life

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for them.

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, if a criminal

wish

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to change his

life

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after change of their mind

are

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he is

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unable to do

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that

person

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known

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is known

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to be a criminal in

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public. Because he will not be treated like

others

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or will not

able

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to find a job anywhere if his identity is revealed.

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, they may have

start

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his

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criminal activity again because

society

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society is

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not willing to accept them.

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, it is best to consider both

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before

make

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the decision.

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, there are those who think making

criminals

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information

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public is best but some

others

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thinks

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it is not

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best idea.

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, in my

opinion

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if a criminal

person

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willing

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start

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new

life

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in a

societly

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society

better to not reveal their

information

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public

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the public

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otherwise

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people should know

whao

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who

what

they are dealing with for their own safety. I believe records must be revealed to the public only necessary to do so and give

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chance to criminal to live their new

life

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by keeping their activities secret.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

311 words

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