The diagram below show the change that have taken place ar queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.

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The diagrams compare and contrast the change of Queen Mary Hospital's construction and its'

surrounded

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buildings from 1960 to 2000.

Overall

, The area of

hospital

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the hospital

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had

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remained during

this

period,

however

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however,

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there were different buildings which

are

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used

various

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purpose

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purposes

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after its

consruction

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construction

in 1960. In 1960, there

were

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only

hospital

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a hospital

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car

park

, shopping

centre

and farmland. Between 1960 and 1980, the place of hospital and

car

park

was

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the

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same location and covered

the

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exactly the same size.

Nonetheless

, the area

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which was used as

shopping

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a shopping

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centre

and farmland

transformed

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was transformed

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three buildings that were cancer

centre

, pharmacy and nursing school. After following years until 2000, the

car

park

and nursing school area halved and

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a nursing

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school

added

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next to the

car

park

. There were noticeable

difference

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that

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in that

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cancer

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the cancer

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centre

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expanded nearly three times

where

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were

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located at

old

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nursing

scholl

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school

place. The pharmacy continued to

served

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at the same location in 2000.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, park, centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

154 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

initial structure
renovations
expansions
hospital complex
infrastructure
layout
capacity
technological advances
environmental footprint
sustainability practices
pedestrian pathways
parking facilities
medical wards
specialist units
outpatient services
landscaping
public transport links

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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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