The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentages of meals
in
Change preposition
with

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three types of nutrients, including
sodium
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, saturated fat and added sugar which
consumed
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are consumed

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in the USA.
Overall
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,
in
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apply

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dinner
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foods contain
sodium
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and saturated fat most among
other
Correct article usage
the other

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three meals, whilst
in
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apply

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snacks
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had
Wrong verb form
have

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sugar the most. The two first former nutrients have nearly a similar portion in each
meals
Change to a singular noun
meal

The singular quantifier each is followed by the plural noun meals. Consider changing the noun to the singular or using a different quantifier.

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. In terms of
sodium
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, breakfast
contain
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contains

The plural verb contain does not appear to agree with the singular subject breakfast. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

this
Correct pronoun usage
apply

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about 14% and it is the same
percentages
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percentage

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as
snacks
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

,
while
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

in
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apply

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saturated fat is
least
Correct article usage
the least

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at 16% at breakfast and
contained
Wrong verb form
contains

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb contained. Consider changing it.

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21% in
snacks
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.
However
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
snacks
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

comprise sugar most at 42%,
whereas
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

breakfast has the same
percentages
Fix the agreement mistake
percentage

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as saturated fat
at
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during

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the same meal period. During the
dinner
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, 43% of
sodium
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is contained, followed by 29% at lunch.
Similarly
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, in saturated
fat
Add a comma
fat,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase in saturated fat. Consider adding a comma.

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37% and 26%
is comprise
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is comprised

It appears that the form of the verb comprise does not work with is in this sentence.

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at
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of

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dinner
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and lunch, respectively.
At
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In

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afternoon
Correct article usage
the afternoon

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meal, 23% is contained at
dinner
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

which is greater than lunch (19%).

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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