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The graph below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar charts depict the
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rates of secondary and tertiary
education
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 in 4 different regions by providing the percentage of school-aged
students
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. The percentage of
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European
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 being educated surpasses all other countries by
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the
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educational level and
genders
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gender
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 meanwhile that of Sub-Saharan
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 is the lowest by
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 categories. For secondary
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, the proportion of secondary school
European
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students
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 significantly outnumber the other regions, namely 100% of female and 90% of male got educated. Meanwhile,
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Latin America and East Asia follow respectively, sharing a similar distribution with around half of the percentage of
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students
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 for
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gender
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.
Students
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 in Sub-Sahara Africa are least educated with around 10% of
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men
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 and 20% of women. Meanwhile, the trend of the rate of higher
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 among people is striking similar to that for secondary
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.
European
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 countries take the lead, having approximately 50% of
both
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 sexes in schools.
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, even though the countries are ranked comparably as
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: Latin America, East Asia and Sub-Sahara Africa, their counts are approximately 30%.
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