The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The graph gives information about the percentage
particular
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of particular
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countries between 1940
to
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and
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2040. Units of measurement as a percentage.
Overall
, the share of the country's
population
in
USA
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the USA
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and Japan
have
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has
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increased over the period given. As it is shown by the chart, it can be clearly
seeing
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seen
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that
proportion
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the proportion
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of the
population
in Sweden experienced
a
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apply
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significant growth. The
population
of the United States has been
being
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the highest for the entire study period from 1940 to 1980. It has increased from about 9% to 15%,
however
by 2020 it has slightly decreased by 13%.
Moreover
, a
rapidly
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growth to 23% will occur by about 2040 A glance at the graph reveals that the
population
of Japan aged 65 and over in 2025 will
be
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sharply
climbed
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climb
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to 25%, but between 1940 and 1990 it has moderately gone down from about 5% to 3%. Another line graph
which
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apply
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shown
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shows
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Sweden a
dramatically
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upsurge to 25%
all
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apply
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of
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in
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the period .
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