The diagram below show the change that have taken place ar queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.

The diagram below show the change that have taken place ar queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.
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The diagram illustrates
about
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that the
queen
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Queen
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Mary
hospital
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Hospital
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have
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been altered since its construction
of
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in
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three periods between 1960, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
from the perspective, the shopping
centre
and farmland have changed by the cancer
centre
, nursing school and pharmacy.
According to the
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diagram shows that in 1960,
the
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Mary
hospital
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Hospital
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had
shopping
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a shopping
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centre
, farmland, hospital and car park. But two decades ago, the farmland had
altered
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by the nursing school
along
with
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the shopping
centre
was divided
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two
centre
which was the cancer
centre
and
pharmacy
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the pharmacy
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. Remains both have not been altered. In 2000, the car park and the nursing school lengths had been diminished
instead
of the cancer
centre
place was enlarged.
Hospital
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and pharmacy have not faced any changes which means these two had the same measurements and lengths.
Similarly
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the main road only was the same in these three periods of construction work.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • initial structure
  • renovations
  • expansions
  • hospital complex
  • infrastructure
  • layout
  • capacity
  • technological advances
  • environmental footprint
  • sustainability practices
  • pedestrian pathways
  • parking facilities
  • medical wards
  • specialist units
  • outpatient services
  • landscaping
  • public transport links
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