many governments think that economic progress is their most imprtant goal. some people however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country discuss both views and give your opinion

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Unquestionably, every coin has two sides and so are the

people

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. Society’s

people

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are divided into two groups and

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, economic growth and

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other kind

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of progress has become a topic of debate among

people

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essay will compare and contrast both of the opinions

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my opinion which is in the favour of former

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will be discussed in a sensible conclusion. Initiating with the points supporting

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school of thought,

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, some group of

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who are of the

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that economic development is regarded as the most beneficial achievement for a homey.

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, the United Kingdom is considered one of the most successful nations with a good economy.

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makes the vast majority of foreigners invest their money in different companies.

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is no doubt that economic development is actually essential. On

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contrasting side,

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who

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another

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view point

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say that

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other types of growth

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as sports are

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important. They believe that

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these

are not only generate

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income for the state but

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serve as sources of entertainment. For ,instance vast majority of

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show their love when watching football especially when their team or homey is playing with other opponents. In fact, it even unites broken homes. Research has revealed that other types of advances contribute to the booming development of a bucolic.

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, it will depend upon the mindsets of the

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that which

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they are in favour of

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The essay lacks clear and comprehensive development of ideas. Arguments presented should be explained and elaborated upon with specific examples to demonstrate the candidate's understanding.

coherence cohesion

The logical structure is somewhat present but sentences should connect more naturally. Transition phrases should be used correctly to ensure a smooth flow of ideas throughout the essay.

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Introduction and conclusion are present but need to be more defined with a concise thesis statement and summary. The opinion needs to be clearly stated in the introduction and reiterated in the conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

261 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Economic prosperity
Infrastructure
Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
Foreign investment
Social equality
Cultural heritage
Sustainable development
Environmental conservation
Technological advancement
Living standards
Holistic approach
Happiness index
Quality of life
Innovation
National identity
Harmonious society
Human rights

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many governments think that economic progress is their most imprtant goal. some people however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.

Some people think an international car free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution.Others think there are more effective ways do to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation.to what extend do you agree or dis agree.

You recently broke your leg and your colleagues from work sent you get well cards and presents. Write a letter to them and say •Thanks them for supporting you. •Describe how you spend your time. •Explain about your recovery process.