The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features make comparisons where relevant

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates information about
yearly
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the yearly
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incomes of three different bakeries
like
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apply
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: Barnie's Buns, Lovely
Loaves
and
Robie
's
Bakery
in London, over 10 year
period
.
Overall
, it could be seen that
Robie
's
Bakery
had
a
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the
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highest income,
while
the
last
place is Lovely
Loaves
.
In
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At
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the end of the
period
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period,
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the Lovely
Loaves
switched
place
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places
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with Bernie's
Bakery
.
To begin
with, the most interesting thing is that,
Robie
's
Bakery
was stable
in
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for
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period
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a period
the period
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of 5 years,
with
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apply
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earning about 55.000 pounds per year.
In addition
to
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apply
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,
Robie
's
Bakery
grew dramatically fast in 2007 to 2008. Another
striting
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striking
thing
that
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is that
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the earnings of
the
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apply
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Bernie's Buns began
with
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at
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20.000 pounds merely. Having dropped slightly to 2002 in 2001,
then
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apply
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Bernie's
Buns
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Bun's
Buns'
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anual
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annual
earnings almost doubled
with
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to
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39.000 pounds. Turning to, the Lovely
Loaves
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
between 2000 and 2004. Despite,
went
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going
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up
considerbly
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considerably
, decreased dramatically in the given
period
of 2004 to the end
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