The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps demonstrate the current version of the city
centre
of Islip which is a small town and its proposed enhancement plan.
Overall
, the plan is surrounding
most Change the verb form
to surround
area
of the Fix the agreement mistake
areas
centre
with dual carriageway
Fix the agreement mistake
carriageways
while
widening it toward to countryside and adding some facilities into that area.
First of all, there is a main road
which streched
east to west through the city Correct your spelling
stretched
stretches
centre
. This
road
has two side
roads, one is leading
to Wrong verb form
leads
school
Correct article usage
the school
while
the other leading
to Wrong verb form
leads
park
. Add an article
the park
While
the main road
is to be pedestrianized, the two side
roads are to be turned into a carriageway
extending to the countryside north of the town centre
. The school and housing facility placing
Wrong verb form
placed
at
the south Change preposition
on
side
of the plan will remain the same.
Secondly
, the shops which are in
the Change preposition
on
southside
of the main Correct your spelling
south side
road
currently also
will remain the same as it is now. Just between the shops and south
Correct article usage
the south
side
of the planned carriageway
, new
housing facility will be added Correct article usage
a new
beween
the replaced housing and Correct your spelling
between
park
which are already placed in the current version and the park
will be smaller in its size.
Lastly
, the shops on the north side
will be removed and instead
new facilities Add a comma
instead,
such
as bus
station, shopping Correct article usage
a bus
centre
, car park
and new housing will be added. Furthermore
, there will be new
Correct article usage
a new
side
road
from the carriageway
toward to
new housing placed Change preposition
apply
at
the north Change preposition
on
side
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