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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the information about how much money
is
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 spent on many purposes in one week in 1968 and 2018. The figures are given in percentages.
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, it can be seen from the graph that, most families
used
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spent
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 their income on food in 1968
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 spent on leisure activities in 2018. In 1968, the highest percentage of income
were
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 spent on food with 35%, followed by housing and clothing and
footware
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footwear
, with the figure being the same number at 10%.
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, there were significant changes in 2018, the percentage of food and clothing and
footware
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footwear
 declined
into
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to
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 the half number
of
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in
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 1968. In
contrary
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contrast
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, housing was increased to 20%. For
house hold
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household
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 goods, there were not any changes
with
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in
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 the percentage. Leisure time was not popular in 1968 but rose
into
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to
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 the highest number at 23% in 2018, came after with housing which was still the second same in 1968.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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