The chart below shows the average money spent per costumer on various types of equipment in a Canadian sports store

The chart below shows the average money spent per costumer on various types of equipment in a Canadian sports store
The line bar depicts the amount of money a
custumer
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customer
spent on average in a Canadian sports store, from the year 2000 to 2020.
Overall
, Football was the most lucrative sport for the shop,
while
consumers did not spend as much
for
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Tennis and Swimming. Consumers in 2000 spent $60.00 on Football
equipments
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.
This
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number
slightly decreased from 2005 to 2010, until it experienced a sharp rise that kept going until it reached around $70.00 in 2020. The opposite happened for Rugby; the chart shows a peak in 2010
where
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custumers
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customers
spent $40.00 on
such
items but
this
number decreased and in 2020 amounted to around $30.00. At the beginning of the survey, in 2000, customers spent around $30.00 on Tennis
equipments
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and $10.00 for Swimming.
This
data reversed over time, with
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spending $30.00 on Swimming items and only $10.00 for Tennis.
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