The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to 6 years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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essential
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for a better future.
Children
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from all
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financial
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the right to attend school and learn. I
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free schools in 3rd generation
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countries
will reduce
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poverty
. First of all, all
children
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the right to learn how to read and write regardless of their
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status. Free education will increase the number of educated
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from
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families, since money is one of the
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obstacles
they face. One educated
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in a family will be a good example for
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to seek learning.
for example
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, The educated
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can help in teaching his/her
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and other kids in the family and reduce the load on teachers in school.
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, Learning
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a better
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opportunity
for an individual to get a better job with a better salary to support his/her family. In poor countries
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one
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can be responsible
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a large number of
children
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since a lot of their
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parents
die either from starvation or disease. Having a better job will help
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reduce the burden and increase the number of healthy educated
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until
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poverity
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poverty
cycle ends. In conclusion, I
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that free education is a must for all
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especially
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in poor countries.
Educated
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person
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may become an Idol for
other family member
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another family member
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also
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income.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Basic literacy
  • Numeracy skills
  • Socio-economic development
  • Sustainable education
  • Universal access
  • Public policy
  • Employment opportunities
  • Quality of education
  • Infrastructure
  • Holistic approach
  • Fiscal challenges
  • Educational reforms
  • Global initiatives
  • Human capital
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