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Band 6

The pie charts below show how teenagers in Japan and Australia spent their money in 2019.

The pie charts below show how teenagers in Japan and Australia spent their money in 2019.
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The provided pie chart illustrates the percentage of expenditure by different categories of youths in
Japan
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 and
Australia
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 in 2019.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the highest expense of youths in
Japan
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 and
Australia
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 was food. The least expenditure of adults in
Japan
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 and
Australia
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 was books and other.
To begin
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 with, the figure describes that the majority of spent money
in
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 adolescents was
food
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 at 37%, followed by clothes at 25%, and videos/computers at 22%
respectively
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apply
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.
However
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, young people in
Japan
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 and
Australia
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 spent money at least
for
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 books and food, both at 8%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending habits
  • savings
  • electronic goods
  • physical goods
  • cultural differences
  • social media influence
  • advertising impact
  • education expenses
  • priority
  • trends
  • analysis
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • impact
  • expenses
  • categories
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