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The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph explains
about
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the shift of the estimated maximum
number
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 of
Asian
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elephants
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 in 9
Asian
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 nations in the span of 7 years from 1997 to 2004. It is shown on the graph that
India
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 had the highest
number
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 of
elephants
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population
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 of almost 10000 in the year 1997.
On the other hand
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, Myanmar, the
second highest
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Asian
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 country in the same year, recorded about half of the
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elephants
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population
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 in
India
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 amounting to about 5000
elephants
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, followed by Thailand with approximately 4000
population
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 of
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elephants
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.
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, Malaysia and Sri Lanka had about 3000
elephants
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. Other countries
such
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 as Vietnam, Cambodia, Laos and China estimated less than 2000
elephants
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. In the year 2004,
India
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 remained the
Asian
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 nation which had the highest
number
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 of
elephants
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population
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 with around 7500
elephants
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 nationwide, followed by Myanmar with almost 5000
elephants
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.
Overall
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, the graph shows the decrease in the
number
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 of
elephants
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population
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 from 1997 to 2004 in
India
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, Myanmar, Thailand, Vietnam, Malaysia, Sri Lanka and China.
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, the
population
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 of
elephants
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 in Cambodia slightly
increase
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of
elephants
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population
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 in Laos remained
in
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 about 1000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, asian, elephants, india, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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