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edinburgh visitors survey what are the city's best features

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The chart shows what visitors like most in Edinburgh city. In general, a tourist destination is a choice
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 people after busy work. So Edinburgh city is a wonderful point of arrival. As shown in the pie chart,
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 arts festival is the most common at 36% and 22% choose its friendly inhabitants. 16% of visitors followed both its museums and galleries and its cafés, bars and restaurants. The other stands out 10%.
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, visitors think the city’s cultural attractions are its best features.
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Task Achievement
The introduction lacks a clear context or overview of the data presented. You should start with a sentence that introduces the chart and briefly describes its main findings.
Task Achievement
The main body of the essay does not sufficiently explore the details of the chart. More information and comparison could be provided about visitor preferences.
Coherence and Cohesion
You need to structure the essay in clear paragraphs, with each one covering a single main idea or aspect of the chart. Group similar features together and compare them for a more developed response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph should begin with a clear topic sentence that indicates what the paragraph will be about. Ensure that the rest of the paragraph develops the idea introduced by this topic sentence.

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